| | Inspector Clause - Chapter One | |
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Cheesybanana Yellow Swordsmaster
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| Subject: Inspector Clause - Chapter One Mon Jan 12, 2009 11:43 am | |
| This was a bit of work I submitted for my English GCSE for Original Writing.
Inspector Clause was an interesting man. Just sitting there in his office, with a single light flicking on and off. He was just sitting there, stroking his beard and twirling his moustache with his old, wrinkled hands. From this you could probably tell he wasn’t young; some people would even call him a pensioner, but he would simply reply to that “But I am still young at heart” with his distinct German accent.
His office wasn’t the most normal of offices, to be honest. Everywhere you look there were posters, not of bands, or anything normal like that. There were elephants, on every single poster! Grey, blue, yellow and polka dot elephants! When questioned about this, Clause would reply “You would be amazed how much you could learn from elephants. They help me a lot, in my job.”
That wasn’t the only strange thing about his office. It was very outdated. For example, his phone, bright red. I’ve forgot what they call it. It’s the one in which you stick you finger in and spin it round. You know the one I mean!
Clause always wore the same clothes. A black suit, with a bright red, silky tie. It feels fantastic to touch, it’s hard to describe how it feels, the closest to it is probably…silk. His shoes were odd, very odd. They curled up at the toe, it looked like a spiral! The amount of hours of joy it gave to people when they saw them. I must admit, I laughed the first time I saw them!
Inspector Clause was thinking. Thinking hard. He was thinking about, not a mystery, but a game. A card game. He was playing it with his faithful friend, John Fry, except Inspector Clause just called him Fry. Fry liked to look good but he always failed miserably. He always stank from the amount of aerosols he uses every day, it must have cost him a fortune. Clause often teased him about this but he simply ignored him and carried on with what he is doing beforehand. This annoys Clause as he likes to get attention, but it made it worse when he is ignored by a British. It’s immoral.
Anyway, they were locked in a battle of wits; they needed all their skills to play this game, the game of kings. Snap. You may be laughing but this game contains intelligence and fast reactions. Exactly the qualities a good spy needs. “You will not beat me, Mr Fry” exclaimed Clause, in his fantastic German accent.
“On the contrary, Inspector Clause, you will find I already have. Snap.”
This annoyed Clause. You see, Clause isn’t the type of person who isn’t used to losing. You could even say he was spoilt. However this time he just paused for a couple of seconds and calmly, without shouting, said “Damn”.
“I am surprised at you Clause, for two reasons. One. You almost never swear, at your great standard you should not be swearing. Two. You lost. You never lose, ever. If I am winning, no matter how far I am in the lead, you always win.”
After this statement John decided to call it a night. It was late. 11pm in fact. He was tired, besides he’s got to drive through all the taxi’s transporting all the alcoholics from pub to pub. Anyways, you don’t want to be out too late in the middle of Manchester. He was going to stop for something to eat on the way back, he just loves pizza, the succulent cheese etc. Anyway, back on topic.
Shortly after this, after packing the cards away, Clause was thinking of leaving as well. So he packed his bag and put his fur coat on. But just as he was about to leave, the phone rang. Clause paused. (The phones ring was horrible to hear, it was so high pitched!) He slowly turned and walked towards the phone. Who would be phoning him at this time of night?
“Hello, Inspector Clause speaking, how may I help you?” The phone went dead. They hung up! Inspector Clause was suspicious. Why did they hang up? Why were they even calling him at this time of night? His curiosity overpowered him. I guess he never hear the phrase ‘Curiosity killed the cat’. But it’s too late now…
So Clause picked up the phone and dialled the number out loud. “One, Four, Seven, One.” After about twenty seconds (very patient, I know!) someone picked up. “Hello?”
“Hello, I am Inspector Clause; I believe you just phoned me, am I correct?”
“Yes but you hung up.”
“I did not.”
“You did.”
“Didn’t.”
“Did.”
“Anyway, what did you phone me for?”
“I would like to invite you to a special party.” Clause thought for a second. “Why are you inviting me at 10 O’clock in the morning? The phone went dead again. Clause sat and thought for a second. He recognised that voice, it was very familiar. It was on the tip of his tongue. “THAT’S IT!” he exclaimed. He paused frightened. Nervously, his hands shaking, he whispered “Steven White”.
Claus has a good reason to be scared. A very good reason! You see, Steven is, or at least was in jail. For the attempted murder of…Inspector Hans Clause. | |
| | | Cheesybanana Yellow Swordsmaster
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| Subject: Re: Inspector Clause - Chapter One Mon Jan 12, 2009 11:44 am | |
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| Subject: Re: Inspector Clause - Chapter One Mon Jan 12, 2009 11:44 am | |
| WOW lol what did you get for that? |
| | | Cheesybanana Yellow Swordsmaster
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| Subject: Re: Inspector Clause - Chapter One Mon Jan 12, 2009 11:50 am | |
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| Subject: Re: Inspector Clause - Chapter One Mon Jan 12, 2009 11:51 am | |
| Were doing poem's lol its so boring |
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| Subject: Re: Inspector Clause - Chapter One Mon Jan 12, 2009 11:56 am | |
| We do poems once a week and this 3 times a week. | |
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| Subject: Re: Inspector Clause - Chapter One Mon Jan 12, 2009 12:20 pm | |
| We do something like that but i cant remember what it is lol |
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| Subject: Re: Inspector Clause - Chapter One Mon Jan 12, 2009 4:38 pm | |
| Wow, I really liked that. Great job Cheesy. Good ending. A second part might come out, perhaps? | |
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| Subject: Re: Inspector Clause - Chapter One Mon Jan 12, 2009 5:51 pm | |
| Lol, first it was 11 at night, then 10 in the morning? | |
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| Subject: Re: Inspector Clause - Chapter One Mon Jan 12, 2009 6:25 pm | |
| Cool passage, I would have liked it more if you did not use so much direct criteria so to speak, maybe you could have let the reader infer on somemore things such as his age, but just in my personal opinion. I really like that in stories, when the writer enables the reader to think about these kind of things without being directly told. Again, don't take it personally, just more of my taste. | |
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