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PostSubject: The Black Hole, Chapter Two   Fri Dec 26, 2008 5:40 pm

Ah, so here it goes. Here's how they worked out at the last day of high school: (These chapters are written in play form to save time)


Rick: ...congaratulations, Larry! I can't believe we worked out from all these years... (tear-eyed)
Larry: Yea, I need a BIG break from school these days. I'm... I'm.. I'm not going to college or get a job....
Rick: ARE YOU INSANE!? Where would you live? So school was a waste of your previous and present life!?
Larry: Actually, it had a better purpose than learning...
Rick: (Konks him on the head a few times)
Larry: Stop that! It DID have a better purpose...
Rick: Like what?
Larry: It is... it is... my home...
Rick: You don't have a house!? So where's your mom and dad!?

Silence.

All was silence.

Larry: (Melting into pieces)
Rick: LARRY!? OH MY GOD! WHAT THE (bleep!) IS HAPPENING TO YOU!?
Larry: Ehehehehehehe.... I WAS NEVER YOUR----

Then Rick woke up. It was all a dream. But more like his worst nghtmare. But then he saw red, all over his house. He thought he went blind, so he rubbed his eyes. Still red. Red everywhere. He smells very hot, volcanic air. He looked out the window. Now black. All black... but only a small figure- a volcano from far away. He ran awar from the red, oozy, slime and ran t his parents' bedroom. No-one. Nothing but red. Bu then he saw the black coming from the windows. It shattered all the glass; it looked like something or someone was out for them. Black holes everywhere he saw. He grabbed his bow and arrow and headed out the wooden doorway. Still red and black. But something was laughing-- he could hear a slight giggle from far away. Then he looked at the volcano. It was erupting in his eyes. He looked at the slime. It was turning black! So, deep in his thoughts, he knew what it was-- the legendary ghost. But it was deep in his thoughts. So he didn't obviously know it. He had a better thought in mind--- run...

END OF CHAPTER TWO
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PostSubject: Re: The Black Hole, Chapter Two   Fri Dec 26, 2008 6:18 pm

Few spelling errors again, run it in ABC check on MS Word.
Black holes will suck in everything and collapse it. How could there be "Everywhere he looked"?

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PostSubject: Re: The Black Hole, Chapter Two   Fri Dec 26, 2008 8:17 pm

It is a fiction story AND there are TYPOS, not spelling errors.
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PostSubject: Re: The Black Hole, Chapter Two   Fri Dec 26, 2008 8:30 pm

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PostSubject: Re: The Black Hole, Chapter Two   Fri Dec 26, 2008 8:32 pm

Konrada wrote:
It is a fiction story AND there are TYPOS, not spelling errors.

OK. Then what do the blackholes do if they dont suck everything in?

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PostSubject: Re: The Black Hole, Chapter Two   Fri Dec 26, 2008 8:58 pm

You'll find out in another chapter...
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PostSubject: Re: The Black Hole, Chapter Two   Sat Dec 27, 2008 4:04 am

What the bleep? That made me laugh. This story is exiting I wanna read more.

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PostSubject: Re: The Black Hole, Chapter Two   Sat Dec 27, 2008 11:20 am

You know, I would have added those cuss words inside the story. Gives it a kick. But I think I fathom the story...better at least, now that a second chapter has been published. Still, it reminds me of the stories of Pompeii and the volcano eruption there. I like it.
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