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PostSubject: The life of a slave girl   Wed Feb 25, 2009 5:42 pm

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Dear
Diary,





Strangers
came to my village. I did not know them well. They dressed strange,
their skin was pale, and they were forcing people onto a strange
object. It was big and it had huge cloths that the wind blew to make
the object move across the water. My village gathered around to
watch. The strangers took people separating them from their families.
Then they forced me into somewhere I have not seen or been to before.
They chained me against a little girl. She looked only five years
old.






β€œMomma!”
she cried. β€œDon't let them take me!” But her momma couldn't here.
We were gliding across the ocean.


Maykao


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PostSubject: Re: The life of a slave girl   Wed Feb 25, 2009 7:13 pm

Not bad, but I would say have a more what you say 'grabbing' openning. It was decent, but I would just start with a more grabbing opening. Nice idea though Razz

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PostSubject: Re: The life of a slave girl   Wed Feb 25, 2009 7:24 pm

Not bad. You're 10? Kinda easy. Give more details Razz
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PostSubject: Re: The life of a slave girl   Wed Feb 25, 2009 7:59 pm

Bad, i'm sorry to have to say.
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